Monday, 10 June 2013

Zahra's writing about a journey

WALHT write a narrative about a place we will journey to. 

Success Criteria
I need to say where I'm travelling to
I need to include some descriptive words
I need to say what I can see. 

When I am a Mum I am going to live in Outer Space. I am going to see some shooting stars and they are really sparkly. I can see a Rocket Ship shooting as fast as a whale. I see a white moon. The background is black all over the space ship. I can see the people.



Zahra
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3 comments:

  1. Anonymous12 June 2013 at 15:15

    I like how you have said where you are travelling to. You told us what you might see and used your describing words.

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  2. Anonymous17 June 2013 at 13:29

    Mrs Singh said, "I like the way you used lots of descriptive words especially the words you used to describe the stars."

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  3. Anonymous20 November 2013 at 14:58

    I loved all your verbs next time make it 2 lines longer by your sister chloe coooooooooooooooooooooooooool story

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